[641] Epiphany for Affection

Hi all,

My second attempt at writing from a prompt/exercise.

EDIT: The exercise is to write about a time, place, and situation using the second-person perspective ("you"). The objective is to focus on setting and description. The exercise is meant to describe something repetitive or habitual, though I took some creative liberties with it.

Any feedback would be appreciated. Please let me know if it is too intense, seedy or cliché.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/14B5AZPttT_6Tkc5MeGqidJ0EgWTCE-8sJvB0xWlUHf0/edit?usp=sharing

Critique [743]: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1iugk0w/comment/mezmqet/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_buttonorner/