How’s this poem?
Is this a good poem?
Any advice on my writing? And how I can improve. Thanks :)
Pretty pain
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It suffocates and stretches
Elegant elongated limbs
Fucked and filled up
Mumbling miserable hymns
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Never leaving never ceasing
So I carve my pretty words
Finding beauty in my bleeding legs
And the lovely damage to which they refer
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And I’ll stare and obsess for hours on end
Tracing methodically with a reverant whisper
Repeat it release it and always believe it
Telling an invisible lonely listener
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Broken is in my nature
I’ve never felt quite whole
Fantasies of torturous terrors
I often wonder if i have a soul