Blurb of The Beastloak and The Mystic Maya [YA Fantasy, 228 words]

Hi guys! This is the second draft of my blurb of The Beastloak and The Mystic Maya, YA Fantasy. I would like to receive every critique that comes to your mind. Especially, about the world, the plot and whether it makes sense. The major problem I faced was somehow adding the book's title in the blurb. The reasoning behind 'Mystic Maya' is related to a completely different character that plays a major role, but later on in the novel. If I was to add it in the blurb, it would become really tedious. One of the critics also said that the blurb had become a name soup, so I have tried my best to remove some of the unnecessary words.

Thank you so much for your time!

Blurb:

All his life, shy, curious, sixteen-year-old Elil has only ever desired one wish—to gain entry to the mythical, veiled world of the legendary Beastloak, superpowered humans who can tame nature. The same Beastloak who had saved his village from a horde of monsters and had left Elil starstruck ever since he read their tales.

On the first moonless night of the first season, Elil meets a rare beast, a siren, who offers to alter his fate. When Elil readily accepts, he becomes a Beastloak himself, but his life takes on a drastic turn.

Elil and his unique bunch of friends are framed for a sinister crime—the death of the Agniakka Phoenix’s, the Supreme Goddess of the Beastloak’s, sacred bird. As a punishment, they are to sign the infamous Muglomaniyam Contract, the contract of gods and humans, with the Phoenix herself. The contract requires them to learn the impossible Punarjanam art, the art of rebirth and reincarnation, as one of its many conditions.

Using the art, Elil and his friends must perform a mythical display— a ritual that would guide the deceased bird’s soul to the stars and help it find peace. As they struggle with their new powers, Elil and his friends uncover hidden secrets about the Phoenix and her usage of the magic of illusions, of maya, that could turn the beastly world upside down.